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_____________________________________ from author Eileen Albrizio
Wednesday, April 26, 2023
Tuesday, April 25, 2023
I'm Back!
Hello! I know it's been a while and I'm sorry about that. I'm not sure why I stopped posting stuff, but it struck me the other day that I have this blogging site so, I should be using it! I have been writing over the last couple of years. Writing a lot, in fact. I've been writing poetry and finishing up my latest novel. The novel is titled One Good Kick, and it's a psychological thriller placed in Hartford, CT, in late 1989. This is the story of Annette Goode, a promising young editor who, after drinking too much at the office holiday party, accidentally shoots a strange man in a parking garage. Here, she makes a fateful choice and leaves the scene without reporting the incident. Despite her initial struggles with her conscience, she finds herself on a tense, winding path of deception that leads to guilt-ridden visions of the man she shot and a chilling spiral of murder and madness. This is a fast-paced, twisty thriller that is sure to satisfy! Currently, the novel is out with agents. No bites yet, but fingers crossed!
One Good Kick is actually my fourth novel written, but only my last novel The Windsome Tree made it to publication. I did work with an agent to get that published, but she since retired and other agents from her agency are either not accepting submissions or they do not work with my genre. So, I'm on the hunt for new representation. I have to say, it's hard, frustrating, and scary. But it's worth the try.
The Windsome Tree takes place in 2014 in the fictional town of Windsome, NC. It's about Mercy Amoretto, a grieving mother of four who lost her youngest child to leukemia. In an attempt to heal, she starts cleaning the house, and in the garage she finds an old rope and a tire. In a fanciful moment, she fastens them together to make a tire swing. Unbeknownst to her, the rope, the tire, and the tree in her yard share a violent history. Once the three are connected, that history is unleashed in the form of two child spirits from decades past. While on the swing, Mercy hears cryptic messages from the spirits and begins to ride the swing obsessively, believing these spirits are key to finding her dead daughter. You can find this on Amazon and B&N, but the Amazon Kindle version has the best free preview. So, check it out!
So, that's basically what I've been up to, besides surviving the world shutting down, keeping a business open, and trying my best to keep up in the writing, publishing, and hocking my books worlds.
I am not good at being consistent with my blogging, so if you have any topics you would like me to address, please drop a note below. I teach creative writing, so I can address a diverse array of topics. I can also talk about other stuff, like cats or cooking (but not cooking cats).
Thank you, everyone. Have a wonderful day, and HAPPY SPRING!
Friday, November 30, 2018
Willington Library Author Trail and Crafts Fair
Tuesday, November 27, 2018
Upcoming Author Events with Eileen Albrizio
I will join fourteen other authors from the CT Authors and Publishers Association for a book signing, along with local craftspeople at 7 Ruby Road, Willington, CT, 860-429-3854.
I will join author R.C. Goodwin for a book signing at 869 Sullivan Ave., South Windsor, CT,
860-432-7411.
I will join author Mark Dursin for a book signing at 869 Sullivan Ave., South Windsor, CT,
860-432-7411.
I will be reading an excerpt from my debut novel THE WINDSOME TREE: A GHOST STORY. An author talk and book signing will follow at 104 Middle Road, Enfield, CT, 860-763-7510.
I will be reading an excerpt from my debut novel THE WINDSOME TREE: A GHOST STORY. An author talk and book signing will follow at 515 Silas Deane Highway, Wethersfield, CT, 860-529-2665.
I will join two other CT authors for a book signing and conversation at 1 Royce Circle (Dog Lane), Storrs, CT, 860-486-8525.
Tuesday, August 21, 2018
Novel-Writing Class
Monday, July 30, 2018
Grief and Writing
My father passed away yesterday, July 29, 2018. I finished the poem today. I never post writings that haven't been read by an editor or member of my critique group, Artemis Rising. But I am posting this because I don't know what else to do.
Saturday, July 28, 2018
Understanding Genre in Fiction
Genre is a category of literature that was first created by the Ancient Greeks and comes from the Greek word genos, which means kind or sort. The term was created to differentiate between prose, poetry, and performance. Today, the term defines a wide variety of literary styles, including comedy, tragedy, horror, science fiction, romance, thriller, mystery, etc. The Greeks set out to simplify the literary and theatrical arts by placing them into genres such as comedy and tragedy. However, as time went on, the genres of literature became more and more complicated, and at times, convoluted. But it is important to never underestimate their importance. Genres help readers understand the style of a book BEFORE they read it. That is one of the major things that help them pick a book to read. So, writers, when you choose to blend one genre with another, it's important to always keep the reader in mind.
Writers love to mix genres, splicing one into another, known as cross-genre or hybrid genre. Examples are historical romance, paranormal romance, science fiction Western, literary horror (my favorite), young adult fantasy, and techno-thriller. There are also hybrid genres that have become so popular, they've been rewarded their own genre name, like steampunk, which is science fiction in a 19th-century setting, incorporating the design of steam-powered machinery.
Is it okay to mix genres? Absolutely, but be careful not to cross so many lines that your story becomes confusing. I find this is the case with the fairly new category of genre called speculative fiction. This is a genre with a wide umbrella, covering horror, fantasy, science fiction, superhero fiction, dystopian, supernatural and any other fiction that is outside the realm of reality. By having this as a separate category of genre, it gives writers freedom to cross into several main genres in one novel. Not that it's bad or wrong, but it could cause some fundamental problems. One is, it could make the novel hard to place. Editors, agents, and publishers are specific about what markets they are targeting, and if they can't target a specific market, they will likely pass on your multi-hybrid novel. Second, readers are essentially the same as editors and publishers. They love to read a specific genre and may avoid your book because it doesn't fit their niche, or they may be disappointed if they expect one thing from your novel and get something completely different. I found this with Peter Straub's Ghost Story.
Thursday, July 26, 2018
Advice for New Writers
Wednesday, July 25, 2018
The Cumbersome Climb of the Indie Author
Now that I've published my debut novel, The Windsome Tree: a ghost story, I am quickly discovering how hard it is to get people to take me seriously. Because I'm under the umbrella of "indie," big-box booksellers and small-town booksellers alike refuse to put my book on their shelves in favor of more established authors with celebrity or a large following. When an independent bookstore says they support indie and local authors, but reject me because I'm a debut novelist published under a small imprint, that's not really supporting independent authors.
Many independent authors have or have had agents guiding them through the quagmire of traditional publishing houses, only to find that smaller, independent presses are their "starter home." That's what happened with me. Independent can mean published through the help of an agent but at an independent press, or it could mean self-published. And there's nothing wrong with that. There are some brilliant self-published authors out there who deserve all the recognition they can get. John Grisham was a lawyer when he wrote his first novel A Time to Kill. The book was rejected 28 times before he went to a small, independent press and published 5,000 copies on his own. In 1931, Irma Rombauer wrote Joy of Cooking with her daughter. It's said she used half of her life savings to pay a local printing company to print three thousand copies. The company had printed labels for St. Louis shoe companies and for Listerine, but never a book. Five years later, Bobbs-Merrill Company acquired the rights. Over the years the book has sold over 18 million copies. There are countless accounts like this.
So, Barnes & Noble may say they don't have the shelf space for every independent author out there. But the local bookstore down the street should certainly carry the book of an author who lives around the corner. That author will do a public reading at the store and potentially bring new customers in. It's a win-win.
For the past 29 years, I've owned with my husband a comic book store in Rocky Hill, CT called Heroes & Hitters. Whenever a local author comes in with a self-published comic, we happily accept it on consignment. We've dedicated a whole corner to indie comic book writers and artists. We place them right under the super popular Walking Dead trade paperbacks to give them focus. It costs us nothing and helps a local talent showcase his or her work.
My additional concern is that some "independent" bookstores charge authors to do readings at their store. I won't mention their name, but a well-known Connecticut indie bookstore charges authors $50 to read at their store, and that's only if they approve the author, which they won't if said author is unknown.
An acquaintance informed me that he knows an author who turned to doing "library" tours, because he couldn't get into the local bookstores. He was quite successful and went on to publish over 20 books.
My goal now is to find alternate ways to get my novel out to the public. I've contacted my local newspaper, and they are publishing a small article on my "success story" as an author. I will be going to the Big-E in September--one of the top-ten fairgrounds and trade show venues in the country--where I'll be selling The Windsome Tree alongside other authors at the Connecticut Authors' and Publishers' Associations' bookstore in the Connecticut Building. And I will be teaching an eight-week novel-writing class beginning in September as part of my local Wethersfield, CT adult education program. So, that's a start.
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| The Big E at the Eastern States Exposition Grounds in Agawam, MA |
Thanks for reading.
Eileen
Monday, April 10, 2017
Read THE BOX UNDER THE BED for FREE!
The Box Under the BedHaunting tales and tidbits pulled from under the bed. These compelling little poems and stories explore the dark side of the human psyche and the ghostly side of life.
Monday, March 27, 2017
I Know What Happens, but Why?
I just finished reading Shirley Jackson's short story The Lottery. Yes, I know. Many of you read this when you were in junior high, but for some reason the Catholic School I went to didn't think this was appropriate reading, so I never had the advantage of all that dissecting that was offered in sixth grade English class. I know what happens in the end--and here's the spoiler--every year a random lottery "winner" had to be stoned to death by the entire community in the town square. But what I don't know is why? Furthermore, I don't know why Shirley Jackson wouldn't fill us in on that. I mean, isn't the motive an essential part of the story?
I've read some analysis on this, but not of it makes sense, as it seems to all be speculative. Even Shirley Jackson had trouble explaining her intentions. Responding to complaints, she told the San Francisco Chronicle in 1948, "Explaining just what I had hoped the story to say is very difficult."
Even the scholars who translated the meaning had to decipher code throughout the story to come up with an explanation. I understand why the story is revered, as its shock value alone is worthwhile. But as a writer and a reader, I am always disappointed in stories that end on a speculative note. Simply put, I as the reader don't want to have to do the work of the writer. I would love to know what you think.
Thursday, December 31, 2015
Wednesday, December 16, 2015
Writing is a Lonely Business
Such is the life of a writer. But then we have a moment when something does happen. The words do come. The sentences form. Paragraphs grow. A scene is created. A chapter. A first draft.
We revise. Rewrite. Revisit. Show it to an agent. Get rejected. Revise. Rewrite. Revisit. Show it to another agent. Get rejected. Repeat.
I'm just here to tell you, it's okay. Stock up on the jello and ramen noodles. Stare out the window. Put down a word. Delete and repeat. Don't give up. I mean, what else are you going to do? Watch Law & Order marathons? Spend half a day going through Facebook feeds, wondering how that meme about the drunk friends is really so funny it makes Janet from telemarketing cry, as the emoticon suggests?
Being a writer can be a lonely business. Until the characters develop. Until the story evolves. Until our minds are so full of souls whom we've created we can barely move. We stop craving the wilted celery and processed cheese spread and rejoice in the company or our characters. That's why we write.
Get a coffee mug, a pin, a desk mat that has printed on it the adage "A successful writer is just an amateur who didn't give up." Every time you think it's not worth it, let your eyes fall on that cliche and get back to work.
That's what I've got for today. I would love to read your comments.
SOMETHING WRITTEN
by Eileen Albrizio
When the new day comes,
reward yourself with words,
invent fantastic worlds,
travel to phantom places,
embrace all that seems impossible,
rejoice in who you are.
~ From The Box Under the Bed
Monday, December 14, 2015
How to Break through the Fear of Writing a Great Poem
Perhaps the biggest problem for poets trying to write a great poem is that the poet doesn't really know what poetry is. How do you distinguish between writing a poem or writing a piece of flash fiction. One of the characteristics most significant in defining poetry is its inability to be defined. But if we can't define it, how can we write it?
What makes poetry different from prose literature can be found in its concise language. It uses a heightened, yet more economic vocabulary. Other characteristics of poetry are its use of literary devices such as meter, rhyme, repetition, alliteration, metaphor, simile, assonance, line and stanza breaks and formal structure. If you are writing FREE VERSE, don’t ignore the fundamental techniques that make poetry substantial.
Most importantly, every poem must have an emotional heart. Even within haiku and its observations of nature, the poet delivers an emotional experience through what she's witnessed.
Perhaps intellectually you understand the fundamentals of what makes a poem a poem.. So, what is keeping you from writing great poetry? The biggest obstacle that keeps us from writing a great poem is FEAR
* Whether we've defined poetry or not, we’re afraid we’ll get it wrong.
* We fear we’re not good enough writers to write one.
* We fear what we want to write about isn’t that interesting.
* We fear what we want to write about is too personal.
* We fear we will be judged by our peers.
* Because poems are personal, we fear we will hurt someone’s feelings.
* The desire to be published creates a fear of writing a poem unworthy of being published.
* We fear we will never get to the point of perfection, so we just don't do it.
* We get intimidated by people who say the words just spill out of them, that poetry comes to them like a muse in the night, that they just wait for the perfect time and the poem comes. We know that doesn't happen for us, so we fear we are not true poets.
How do we break through the fear and write a poem:
* Be active readers of poetry. Pay attention to the way words work together, or don't work together. It is not only important to read poets that speak to you, but also to read poets who you find out of reach or who challenge you.
* Think of creative writing as traveling without a map, or driving a car at night. These metaphors illustrate that writing is seldom a linear process with a known destination. Instead, it involves learning to love language—its tastes and shapes and sounds—and then to go wherever the writing leads. NOTE: If you do this, it’s just the first step. Once you get to your destination, then go back and revisit the poem and think creatively about what it says and what you want it to say.
* Practice writing often, as you would if learning to play the piano or shooting free throws. Instead of expecting a "great" poem every time you write, write in a way that feels "raw and messy."
* Find the emotional core of the poem and connect it to concrete objects: something that can be seen, touched, heard, smelled and tasted by readers and listeners. Every time we feel something, it has a tangible connection. Find that connection and work with it.
* Don't get bogged down in the facts. The only significant truth in a poem is its emotional truth. Don't be afraid to blur the facts in order to get to the heart of the TRUE EMOTION.
* Write without fear. It won't be great when you first throw it down. It will be like the clay on the potter's wheel--a shapeless mass of brown, wet, glop. Get that glop on the wheel. No one will see it but you!
* Once you write, you must revise. Genius comes in the editing. In the revising, don't be afraid to throw away that first line that sparked the poem in the first place. Often that line isn't worthy of the poem, it's just the inspiration. Be your toughest critic. Just as you would write without fear, you must edit without mercy.
Bottom line: The best way to be confident as a poet and write a great poem is to:
1. Read poetry. Read lots and lots of poetry from a variety of poets. Not just today's poets either. Read yesterday's poets. You don't have to like all of it, but you do have to read it.
2. Write poetry. Write lots and lots of poetry in a variety of forms. Copy the forms of today's poets. Copy the forms of yesterday's poets. You don't have to like all the forms in which you write, but you do have to write them.
3. Always remember, you are not alone. All great writers have a fear of writing something great. It's persistence and an unrelenting desire to write that makes us successful.
I WRITE
by Eileen Albrizio
I write, but what I’ve written isn’t right.
Rewrite, but it comes out wrong.
You say don’t stop. Keep writing.
With sound advice and insight,
I go back to the start and be strong
and write again, but it just isn’t right.
Maybe all it needs is a slight
tweaking to help it along.
You say no, it needs more. Keep writing.
New eyes on the lines to shine light
on what might turn what I wrote into song,
but what I’ve written still isn’t right.
An edit won’t make it tight
if the words aren’t where they belong.
You agree and say keep on writing.
I’m not good enough for this fight.
Can’t stop crying when I think of how long
it took me to write what’s not right.
You say I’m awesome because I keep writing.
~ From The Box Under the Bed, available on Amazon.com and Barnesandnoble.com.
The Box Under the Bed
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Monday, January 5, 2015
by Eileen Albrizio
(A short-short story from The Box Under the Bed)
Christmas Day.
She was driving, making up time on the Mass Pike. They were heading to her parents’ house in Newton—maybe it was Shrewsbury. She was chattering on about something. He tuned her out. Or he was at the wheel, laughing at her jokes, playing with the radio. They were going to his sister’s in Bedford. The children were bickering in the back seat. A boy, ten, and a girl, twelve. Their SUV had a TV in the rear. The son, possibly older, had an iPad, was playing video games. The younger daughter quietly watched a movie. Might have been they weren’t rich, didn’t have the trappings. So they bided their time singing medleys the way families did before satellite radio.
Oh my Darling, Oh my Darling, Oh my Darling Clementine—I want a girl just like the girl who married dear old dad.
Perhaps it was just the two of them, only wed a year. He had a few drinks before hitting the road. She told him not to drive. He said he was fine. They were arguing when he changed lanes. He was yelling at her when he swerved. Could have been they weren’t arguing, but enjoying the ride as she drove on that crisp, clear afternoon. It was another driver, drunk, who clipped them while passing. Sent their SUV off the road. She overcompensated, struck the guardrail. The SUV went airborne. And there were children, and they were screaming when it hit the ground, flipped again. Crashed and burst into flames. The children were trapped. Parents unconscious. Pray there were no children. They were staying at their grandparents. It was conceivable the children were only a plan—for someday.
Fireman put out the blaze. Pulled the man and woman from the vehicle. Their clothes were smoldering. EMTs cut off their pants, pulled off their shoes. Laid their bodies on the median. No hurry putting them in the ambulance. A white sheet draped over their heads, down to their thighs.
We drove past them on that Christmas day. You said, Don’t look. I looked. Saw the burnt-out vehicle on its head. And the bodies on the ground. Dear God. What went wrong to stretch those bare white legs out onto the cold, dead earth?
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Thursday, December 4, 2014
A Nice Article on "Possibiliteas!"
Interview on "Possibiliteas: Master-Brew for Creative Minds"
Authors and other creative people, research blogs on the Internet that focus on your talent. If you have a product or service that makes you interesting as a creative person, these bloggers may want to interview you! It's a great way to get the word out to a broad audience.
Wednesday, November 19, 2014
How to Get a Literary Agent
You've written a manuscript and now you want to sell it. You don't want to self-publish, as that requires too much money up front and an intensely difficult marketing campaign afterward. Publishing through the conventional avenues means getting a literary agent, as no major publishing house these days will accept unsolicited manuscripts.
You've labored tirelessly over writing the perfect query, did your research online and through various Writer's Market volumes, and sent out your query to dozens, and for some, hundreds of agents. Most responses come back as a rejection form letter. The rest don't bother to respond at all.
Why? Don't they want fresh new talent? Other people get agents, so you ask yourself, "What am I doing wrong?" The answer: Nothing. The problem: Agents receive hundreds of queries every day, and unless yours is so out-of-this-world fantastic in the very first line, they will likely throw it in the discard basket and tell their intern to send you a form rejection. Some do take the time to read the whole query, but again, if it's not stellar, in the basket it goes. If you are exceptionally lucky, the agent will write you a short personalized note letting you know why your manuscript was rejected. That's a good thing, because then you can revisit the manuscript and make improvements.
The bottom line, however, is you've been rejected. What do you do?
You get out from behind your desk and go meet the agent face to face. That does NOT mean you drive to the agent's office and walk in with your manuscript, plop it on her desk and ask her to take a look. (If anyone has ever read John Irving's The World According to Garp, that's what Garp's mother did with much success. Remember, that was fiction. This is reality.)
The best way for you to meet an agent is to check around your area for writers' conferences. Many areas hold writers' conferences that are within a reasonable driving distance from where you live. See if those conferences offer a "meet-and-greet" segment with a literary agent. Some conferences charge a little more to take part in that. But some don't. If there is a conference that does offer such a segment that doesn't charge extra, sign up, follow the rules, and go. If there are only conferences that offer such a segment at an additional charge, I still recommend you go, but those have pros and cons. The pros are you will get honest, priceless, professional feedback that will only improve your manuscript, and you may actually get interest from an agent. The cons are, some of these agents may not be as interested in picking up new talent as they are in getting paid to do the conference.
Either way, the advantages are numerous.
1.) You are showing the agent you are active in the literary community by actually going out and attending conferences in order to improve your craft and advance your writing career.
2.) You are attending workshops that will actually help you grow as a writer. You will not only get creative writing tips, but tips on how to publish and promote your book.
3.) You will make a more lasting impression on the agent by meeting them in person and talking with them. That is something that isn't possible by simply sending out a query letter.
4.) You are getting critical advice on how to improve the manuscript. They know the market. They know what works and what doesn't. They read hundreds upon hundreds of manuscripts. They are not just giving you an opinion. They are telling you exactly what you need to do to get published. It may sound like a rejection, but it's not. It's a postponement. Once they tell you what needs to be done, do it! Which leads me to the next benefit.
5.) Once you make the suggested improvements, these agents are more likely to revisit the revised manuscript. That is not something an agent who rejected you letter query will likely do.
6.) If the agent rejects your revised manuscript, she will more often than not give you further advice on how to improve it, and she may keep the door open for you to resubmit.
At the end of the experience, the agent may sign you on, she may not. If she doesn't find, out why. She would have invested enough time with you at that point to be honest. The reason may simply be she thought she had a place for it but discovered she didn't. That will allow you to market it to another agent with more confidence.
It may sound daunting, but this method does work more effectively than sending out letter or email queries. And a wonderful benefit is, you have improved your manuscript in a way you never would have been able to otherwise. So, if you do decide to go the self-publishing route, you will have a much better product.
I hope this helps you. The best advice I can give you is don't get discouraged, keep writing, keep revising, take the advice of these professionals gracefully, and never, ever give up. It takes time. But it's time worth taking.
Monday, November 17, 2014
Spreading the Word
I would first like to give you an update on The Box Under the Bed, my new collection of haunting short stories and dark poetry. It is available on Amazon.com and now also available on Barnesandnoble.com. For a sneak peak, go to Amazon.com. To view my cool new video, just click the button below!
Secondly, this weekend, I had a wonderful opportunity to share some of the poems from this collection with my fellow poets, Mary Elizabeth Lang and Suzanne Niedzielska. We were at a charming Tea House in Bristol, CT called The Artist Tree. The walls were covered with paintings from local artists, and the tea was delicious.
Sharing this news with you brings me to an important point. Reading at local venues is a valuable way to get the word out about your work. It gives you opportunities to advertise not only the event itself, but to advertise the work from which you will be reading. Facebook and Twitter are great social sites to spread the word. Reading at local venues also brings in a new audience. People who frequent the Artist Tree Tea House were not my social connections, but now they are!
If you have print books, always choose selections from those so you are holding the book in your hand for the audience to see. If you have only an eBook, create a business card, as I show above. Hand that card out to everyone in the audience and let them know they can get a sneak peak of your book on Amazon.com, Barnesandnoble.com, or any other place where they can access it. That brings them to the site and one step closer to purchasing your book.
Lastly, if you want me to discuss certain aspects of writing or reading on this blog, drop me a note. I would love to hear from you.
Have a great day and keep embracing the written word in whatever fashion you choose!
Eileen :)
Wednesday, November 5, 2014
The Box Under the Bed
In the meantime, I have a new book of short stories and dark poetry, which is available on Amazon.com and Barnesandnoble.com. It's called The Box Under the Bed and it's filled with haunting tales and tidbits pulled from under the bed that are sure to steal your breath and chill your blood right before you sleep. These compelling little poems and stories explore the dark side of the human psyche and the ghostly side of death.
This is an eBook, and you can download it to your Kindle or Nook device.
The Box Under the Bed on Amazon.com
The Box Under the Bed on Barnesandnoble.com
If you do not have a Kindle device, you can download a FREE app to be used on your computer, tablet, or phone. Here's the link:
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Check out a FREE preview of the book on Amazon.com. (Barnes and Noble offers a free preview as well, but the Amazon preview is more extensive.) If you like what you read, the book is only $3.99! I would also love it if you would write a brief review of the book, whether it be on Amazon.com or on Barnesandnoble.com, as reviews help give the book greater search presence. A five-star review is a wonderful way to promote a book on these sites, and as an author, promotion of a book is exceptionally cumbersome, so every little bit helps!
Thank you for following me through my various projects. Please leave a comment, and if you have a book, I encourage you to promote it here!
Thursday, December 17, 2009
First Person vs Third Person – Present Tense vs Past Tense
Acceptable. An odd concept for the creative mind. As artists, do we really want to attach ourselves to what’s acceptable or do we want to expand the boundaries of acceptability, even break through them, and create something completely unique. That’s what Herman Melville did when he wrote Moby Dick. In trying to understand the process of creativity, I took a closer look at Melville’s process of creating.
The now classic author and one of the founding authors of the American literary canon began his career garnering modest success with short novels known as travel logs. They were exotic tales that followed the adventures of some sort of sailor who either traveled to or got stranded on a far away island. The average income reader of the mid 19th century had little opportunity to travel, so they would live vicariously through these travel tales of adventure. When Melville was deciding to write what would become Moby Dick, he was embarking on yet another travel log. When nearly finished with this latest book, his friend and contemporary, Nathaniel Hawthorne, encouraged him to change it. His reason was he recognized Melville’s potential to break down the barriers of the acceptable and create something unique, something that went beyond a step-by-step account of a traveler and delved into the exploration of the human condition. Trusting his friend, Melville went back to the beginning and completely rewrote what he had originally been called The Whale, a simple tale about a sailor on a whaling ship. When finished, he had created the allegorical masterpiece, Moby Dick. He wrote not only in differing tenses throughout the novel, but in differing perspectives, genres, and switched from “fact,” or what was thought to be fact at the time, to fiction. There’s even a section of the book that’s laid out like a stage play. So, you say, if Melville can do it, and to such an extreme, well, so can I! Well, yes, he did do it, but it was an unadulterated failure! It was panned by readers, critics and the public at large. It was such a disaster, it made the sinking of the Pequod a metaphor for his career. His public expected one thing and got another, and they weren’t happy about it. Although he continued to write, he never recovered from the failure of Moby Dick, and instead of making a living as a writer, as he did with his travel logs, he ended up working for the New York Port Authority and when Herman Melville died, the one and only obituary notice in New York spelled his name wrong. True story!
Sure, we’re glad now Melville ruined his career to create his magnum opus, but I’m not certain he was so thrilled about it. He would never know the success of Moby Dick. It wasn’t until the 1920’s that scholars decided to take another look at Moby Dick and with a new more “contemporary” eye, found its brilliance. Unfortunately, Melville died in 1891.
So, what’s the moral of the story? That’s what I pondered for over a week before making my decision and my decision ultimately rested in the answer to this next question. Am I looking for monetary success with this novel, or literary success? Well, both would be nice, but if I had to choose, I would most certainly choose literary success. I’m not being lofty and I can prove it. I’ve been writing for 35 years and I still keep my day job!
Keeping in mind the literary value of the work, I reasoned that using past tense for the ghosts could be effective in defining them as characters of the past, living lives that have already happened. When the reader gets to the protagonist’s present situation and the tense switches over to the present, it could make the action more exciting. To tackle this, however, would take tremendous effort, and that effort would likely be felt in the writing.
To analyze my dilemma further, I decided to think logically instead of creatively. We think in past tense. Our thoughts are reflective. Logically, a novel is most effective when it reads like we think. To force the reader to alter the way he or she thinks would be cumbersome. Do I really want to alter the way a reader thinks when going from page to page through my entire novel? Will the reader be willing to do that? Unlikely. If the act of reading becomes cumbersome, then the words are lost to the style. Style takes precedence over content. In Melville’s situation, his novel was all about style. That was the point, and that’s what makes it work. The novel wasn’t necessarily about a specific plot. Yes, there was a definite plot, several actually, but the main point of the creation was to explore the human condition.
Is that what I am writing, a grand exploration of humanity? NO! I’m writing a fiction story about ghosts. Hardly the place to go crashing down the gates and driving over the well-manicured lawns of acceptable writing styles. I want the reader to focus on the story, not the style of writing. It is the plot of the story that is important, and there is only one tried and true way to get the reader engrossed in the plot, and that’s to write in a style in which they are familiar. But what about the perspective? Should I write Mercy Amoretto’s chapters in the first person while keeping the ghosts in the past?
Well, having blocked out my chapters already, I know that as the novel progresses, most of the chapters become Mercy Amoretto chapters. Therefore, I would essentially be writing the entire second half of the novel in first person perspective. That could be limiting, considering there are other characters at play: her husband, Donovan, and her three children, not to mention her best friend Mary Beth. I would have to relate everything that is happening through the perspective of Mercy. Would that be effective? I think not, mostly because the scary parts of a ghost story often happen when the reader sees something that the main character does not. The scope would be too narrow, less three-dimensional. Plus, switching back and forth would, again, force the reader to change his or her way of thinking throughout the novel. Getting settled into one tense, just to be thrown out and into another one. It could be quite painful, intellectually speaking, and I don’t think I want to torture my reader.
Giving it one final thought, I asked myself, does it really make the novel better to change from the traditional style of writing to something considered unacceptable? The answer again was an unequivocal no!
So, third person past tense it is, all the way through. I’m not caving to convention, ladies and gentlemen. I am simply writing the best novel I can possibly write at this point in my life. If this particular piece works best in the traditional style, then that’s what works best. Period. There’s no need to mess with what works!
Thanks for following along the process. I will come back shortly with my next update on my progress. Until then, happy writing!
Eileen
























